For me to understand a story I would like for the author to draw me into the setting. This means when and where the story takes place. Include me in the text, show me the sights. Let me hear the sounds. Let me feel the atmosphere. What is the aroma that is permeating the air? What is that I am tasting as the author describes the food of that region? Clue me into my surroundings. For instance:
Abby opened the door and sashayed towards room 209. Her teacher, Mrs. Wellington, stood at the chalkboard scribbling the day’s work. Abby unpacked her book bag. Math book? Check. Pencil? Check. Notebook? Abby dug deeper.
“Oh no!” said Abby. She raised her hand. She snapped her finger. Mrs. Wellington turned around.
“May I run to my locker?” asked Abby.
“Hurry up,” said Mrs. Wellington. “The tardy bell will ring in five minutes.”