Susanna Leonard Hill 3rd Annual Holiday Contest Entry. This is my entry. Exactly 350-words. I attempted to take it a different route, but it was 723. So I cut, snipped, and snapped it. Now 350! That’s what I am talking about! Wow. Enjoy it 😀
A HERO’S KWANZAA
Two days before the Kwanzaa Celebration, Devontae and Asia baked a special cake.
It was chocolate with vanilla swirl with African colors – red, green, and black – all over.
“Beautiful!” Asia said. “She’s going to love this. It’s her one weakness.”
Later on, Asia went to put the cake in the fridge, but it was gone.
“Devontae,” she yelled from the kitchen, “I need the cake.”
“It’s on the table,” he replied.
“It’s gone,” she said.
Suddenly, Devontae noticed red, green, and black marks on the door and floor.
Woof! Woof! Woof!
Meow! Meow! Meow!
“Bad Army and Liberty!” the children said laughing.
“We have to have a cake,” said Asia. “It’s her one weakness. We’ll bake another one tomorrow.”
One day before the Kwanzaa Celebration, Devontae and Asia baked another cake.
“Beautiful!” Asia said “She’s going to love this. It’s her one weakness.”
“Put it in the fridge,” Devontae said. “It will be safe there.”
Few hours went by. Bang! Bang! Crash!
The children sprinted to the kitchen.
“Oh no,” said Asia. “Not again!”
“At least we know what happened this time,” said Devontae.
“Sorry,” Dad said peeling himself from the floor. “I was only trying to get the milk from the back of the fridge.”
“We have to have a cake,” Asia shouted. “It’s her one weakness. We’ll bake another one tomorrow.”
The day of the Kwanzaa Celebration, Asia and Devontae hurriedly baked a cake and finished just in time. It resembled the others.
“I am not letting it out of my sight,” Asia said pulling a chair to the counter.
Suddenly, the door opened.
“Momma!” the children screamed as tears streamed down their faces.
“We baked you a cake!” said Devontae.
“We’ll eat a small piece before the Kwanzaa Celebration.”
“Sit!” ordered Asia pulling her mother’s arm. “Take off your uniform. We’ll get your boots. And your duffle bag.”
“How was Iraq?” Devontae asked. “Did you miss us?”
“Of course, I missed my family,” she said kissing their cheeks. “I love you. Let’s talk over cake. It’s my one weakness.”
What a beautiful and moving story, Jackie! Loved it!
Thanks…the original one is 723 words…So I am pushing it. But this will do for now. I am glad you enjoyed it.
A lovely Kwanzaa and homecoming story! And mmmmm chocolate cakes too! Kudos to you on cutting the extra words; that can be so hard. 🙂 Good luck!
I decided to recycle the extra word in a spin-off story now that Mom is home. It will be what happened with the family. I am looking forward to that. Thanks for reading my story. I appreciate it.
Sweet.
Thanks.
Such sweet kids. Nice story Jackie.
Thanks, Dawn. I love yours. It is great. I have to learn how to rhyme. I love reading rhyme so much, but I am not good at it. Off to practice. Well done on your entry. I wish you luck! 😀
What a beautiful story, Jackie! And now I’m craving cake. 😉 Happy holidays!
Thanks, Jolene. Eat a lot for me. I am glad you enjoyed it.
I love the repeating line “She’s going to love this. It’s her one weakness.” and such a sweet ending. Well done!
Thanks, Yvonne. Glad you enjoyed it. 😀
Wow – what patient bakers to produce three in three days! That’s how strong the love is between child and mother – and vice versa!
Nice Jackie!
Thanks, Cathy! Glad you enjoyed it.
Sweet story, Jackie. Homecoming stories always make me tear up. Love the line repeat and the end. I hope you’re feeling better. Happy Holidays!
Thanks!
Cake is my weakness too… but, unfortunately, one of many, not just one! 😉 Well done on cutting your story down by more than half and still ending up with something that feels honest and complete.
Thanks, Michelle. I appreciate you saying this. I am glad you liked it.
Wonderful story, Jackie! I love that the girls know their mother so well. Nicely done!
Thanks, Carrie!
I love the twist that Mom is coming home from her military service!
Thanks, Deborah. I remember those days. Writing about what I know. 😀 I am glad you enjoyed reading it.
What a great story. Persistent kids whose love for their mother shines through. And I learned a bit more about Kwanzaa
Thanks, Linda. I appreciate the kind words. Thanks for the feedback. I am glad you enjoyed it.
That’s a lot of things going wrong, I love how they handled it. Great story!
Thanks, Catherine. Glad to know you enjoyed it.
Well that just made me tear up. Lovely story!
Thanks, Linda. Then , my job is done 😀 Glad you liked it.
Oh, what a lovely story, Jackie! How hard Asia and Devontae worked to make sure their Momma would have her favorite, and how nice that she was able to make it home, safe and sound, for Kwanzaa with her family. That’s what the holidays are all about – being together 🙂 Thanks so much for a heart-warming entry and for taking part in the holiday contest fun! 🙂
Thanks for having the contest. I appreciate it.
Thanks for having it 😀
What a sweet story, Jackie. I love how determined they were. There love shone through.
Thanks, Penny 😀
We all have a weakness…mine is for great stories! Thanks so much for providing that, Jackie.:) And I absolutely love your blog tagline…those are my thoughts exactly!
Thanks, Vivian 😀
Wonderful Jackie! I was wondering who “She” was. Touching.
Thanks, Leslie. 😀
Jackie 🙂
my daughter and I loved your story! it’s sweet! we love how your MC’s never gave up! they made their mother very happy!
Thanks; the things children will do for their mothers 😀
I like the repeated “It’s her one weakness” 🙂
Thank you 😀 I loved writing it.